Lost In Reverie
you are
the silent witness
that tells
no lies
the silent witness
that tells
no lies
a mute confidante
that holds
all secrets
that holds
all secrets
behind the smile
no line or flaw
is hidden
is hidden
you reveal things
as they are
without fear
of reprisal
of reprisal
you bare both
beauty and blemish
beauty and blemish
with cold neutrality
the phantoms
crawling
in one's head
the angst and
trepidations
buried deep in
one's heart
all these chimeras
remain
clandestinely
subdued
crawling
in one's head
the angst and
trepidations
buried deep in
one's heart
all these chimeras
remain
clandestinely
subdued
unless the master
so exposes
so exposes
and as the day dawns
when you
can no longer
hold your
silence
you shatter
into pieces
carrying with you
a thousand riddles
ensconced in
countless
glistening
shards
when you
can no longer
hold your
silence
you shatter
into pieces
carrying with you
a thousand riddles
ensconced in
countless
glistening
shards
© Bing (PinkLady) 2011
Image credit: Link
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hmm I enjoy this, it could be about a parent, a confidante, God, etc...
Enjoy the potluck, nice poem, I enjoyed it thanks.
Here is mine: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/
wise words.
well expressed.
a slim poem, wow.
you rock.
A++
Fantastic! There are so many interpretations,each reaching deeper and deeper. loved the write!
lovely..so beautiful:)
and you have a very inspirational blog..hoping to read more from you:)
bless you!
awwww.... that's so beautifully written..
good job... I enjoyed reading it...
Wow, I really like this one!
The flow is great and I like the story of the mirror. Well done indeed!
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/05/01/darkly-imagined/
lynnaima, thanks for appreciating this. i really enjoyed writing it. :)
jingle, thanks for the high grade. my kids would be so proud of me. :D thanks so much for appreciating.
abthomas, i am humbled by such nice feedback from a poet expert like you. thank you so much. :)
tarunima, nice to see you here. thanks for the visit. :)
inquisitive life, i'm glad that you like it. thanks. :)
jessica, thanks for appreciating. :)
Bing,
Another excellent piece of writing from you!
These words I think are concerned with perhaps how we try to 'bottle things up'. Keep the struggle to ourselves, for as long as possible, until we can take no more.
Most people will have had that experience, at one time.
Best wishes,
Eileen
incredibly beautiful
Beautifully told story of the mirror. I really enjoyed this, Bing.
amazing...
thanks for linking.
amazing...
thanks for linking.
Behind the smile. A great line, image, phrase. Loved the poem.
well expressed words of wisdom, life and God
Beautiful vision and well penned poem
I like how this poem flowed, simple statement with meaningful words to create a beautiful and very visual verse.
I like the way you build the tension in this poem until the mirror shatters. The form works very well too.
Thanks.
Matthew
I love the vulnerability in this poem. There is such a truth and acceptance I feel in the way these insights flow, as if to admire all that is to be, being grateful for who you are as you are right now.
Hope your having a beautiful Spring.
This one hits home for me, great write! Stop in & read Decisions
It makes a mirror seem almost supernatural. Very powerful.
Nice flow..& rythm :)
Good choice of form for this flowing piece which captivates us. It has both depth and beauty and I like the shattered mirror.
Blessings, Iris
Good choice of form for this flowing piece which captivates us. It has both depth and beauty and I like the shattered mirror.
Blessings, Iris
Wonderful poem about seeing one's doubts and fears exposed in one's reflection. The shape of your poem even resembles a long mirror that you hang on the back of a door!
Lovely!
when you
can no longer
hold your
silence
you shatter
into pieces
carrying with you
a thousand riddles
ensconced in
countless
glistening
shards..
I know this one! Ever since I have started to write again; I have been collecting those shards again in an attempt to create some art- piece. An artistic master- piece..
Many Hugs xox
this is really really cool. love it and all of the shards :)
my potluck was here
http://blackswanpoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/01/poem-flexed/
this is a beautiful poem! love the interpretation :)
Ah those little pieces of mirror...and you just reminded me...this is why i just love poetry... :) very beautiful and though provoking and above all so true :)
The words that you used in this poem are simply exquisite!
Wow, wonderful thoughts that are unique and true about mirrors. Love the photo, too. I am upset with what my mirror says to me but I know..it's apathetic. :)
http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/05/why-not.html
Very intriguing poem. Few people see us as we truly are for we really do carry a thousand riddles within us at all times. Beautiful words.
I nominate you pink lady...you deserve every ounce of it for this one :)
I felt a resonance reading this, often being accused myself of being honest with others. Very nicely written, especially with the shortness of the lines that contributes to the flow and keeps the eye moving.
Ms. Queenly
I felt a resonance reading this, often being accused myself of being honest with others. Very nicely written, especially with the shortness of the lines that contributes to the flow and keeps the eye moving.
Ms. Queenly
Exquisite writing. I wish I could write so well, you are truly gifted
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